|
NOTES: Thanks for going along for the ride yesterday. I really felt like it was something that needed to happen, and it just kind of spilled out the way it did. Like Don said, maybe it had something to do with my trip last week :) As for today's installment, the speech will need some work later, but I wanted to get it all out of my head so I can revisit it after draft one is done. Let me know what you think...  Content Removed For Publishing
18 Comments
Pam
1/15/2015 04:10:57 am
I love this story , I just can't figure how chapter 14 works onto this story yet
sonya
1/15/2015 04:13:30 am
love the confrontation and the plan to attack from the rear. i think the speech is calmly daring, not a lot to change.
G. Younger
1/15/2015 04:15:50 am
Memorable, powerful.
Jerry Lovett
1/15/2015 04:31:17 am
You keep us wondering whats next,which is a good point to keep up the interest.
Teresa Anderson
1/15/2015 05:25:49 am
I really appreciate how Congressman McKnight is over confident. I'm sure he will start to make mistakes. That Cal's team will begin to ferret him and his cronies out. I keep thinking with each chapter I want more.
Judy Stone
1/15/2015 05:29:23 am
Great chapter. While you might want to tweak the speech, it's awesome the way it is.
Matt
1/15/2015 05:37:32 am
Keep it coming!!!!
Laura
1/15/2015 05:51:14 am
Great chater and I like the General's speech. I like that he is being proactive and bringing the fight to him on his terms which we don't see much today. I'm looking forward to seeing how you put it all together and the fight is not just about the General and the Marines but also about Zimmer. Keep it coming, the books just keep getting better.
Matt
1/15/2015 05:53:15 am
Just had a thought. Would the Marine Corp Commandant, on such a solemn occasion, end the speech with "Semper Fidelis" or less formally "Semper Fi"?
Marsha
1/15/2015 09:04:29 am
Or maybe even an "OOOH-RAAH"!
Karen Lee
1/15/2015 07:00:50 am
The speech is one I could imagine any of the top MARINE generals giving, one under the circumstances I would expect to here from the Commandant. It just fit and as a Marine is believable...no MARINE I have ever known has had an over abundance of patience, especially when under attack. And yes that comment resembles my personality. :-)
Neill Woodward Sr
1/15/2015 07:34:20 am
A full fight. This is shaping up to be epic. Way to go C.G.
Sandy K
1/15/2015 08:23:34 am
Well played. Very good chapter. I think the General's speech is good as is. Now Cal has the way to get the likes of Congressman McKight. I agree about the end of the speech having the General say "Semper Fi"
Mark
1/15/2015 08:43:44 am
Your anniversary and time off really got you rolling, great chapter. And now you have built the stage for a showdown between the Congressmen and Cal, with the blessing of the Commandant and President Zimmer, I can't wait for more!
Marsha
1/15/2015 09:06:20 am
Good chapter and I like the speech the way it is, but do agree with a "Semper Fi" at the end since he specifically addresses fellow Marines.
Marsha
1/15/2015 09:08:54 am
And a quick question.....is your graphic novel going to be digital only?
CGC
1/15/2015 09:47:51 am
It will probably be in print as well. 1/16/2015 01:09:31 am
I strongly agree with Don Hoffman's comments on the previous chapter, and I like the tone and direction of this chapter. The closing conversation between Cal and General Winfield was great. Leave a Reply. |
NOVELS LIVE
Join me as I write a new novel LIVE with your input. Tell me what you like, what you don't like. This is a joint mission to write a kickass novel. Categories
All
Archives
February 2017
|
RSS Feed